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Look closer.

3/26/2014

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They see me every day.

I greet them at morning carpool; happily pluck their pigtailed, sticky faced tots from the constant stream of automatic minivan doors.

Open, pluck, close, next. Familiarity begets confidence.

 I am the hero of recess; I bring out the bags of dodge balls and jump ropes for the students to play with.

Run, jump, chase, catch. They remind me of Pomeranians at the pet shop.

I say goodbye in the afternoon. I place them back into the stream of minivans; I tuck them safely into their car seats. 

Open, tuck, close, wave. I even chat with their distracted mothers.

They don’t see everything.

My closet is at the end of the hall, where it’s cold and quiet. The administrator says it’s my office. I have mops and buckets and bags of playthings hanging where a window should be.

Brown desk, chair, walls, carpet. Sometimes I disappear into the building.

No one is watching me select from the gaggle, the quietest of the shy ones. My sneer is on the inside, hidden deep within my putrid soul.

Confusion, pain, shame, hush. This is our secret. No one would believe you anyway. You're invisible like me.

You see me every day.

You see what you want to see.

Look closer.

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This post was submitted to tipsylit's prompted, a weekly contest to get the creative juices churning. 
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8 Comments
zeudytigre link
3/28/2014 09:48:42 pm

Creepy and disturbing but evocative. The contrasts you paint are excellent.

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Mollie Claire link
3/29/2014 11:41:55 am

Ha! Yes, I have that effect on people. It's about time I embrace my inner creep. :)

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Ranting Crow link
3/28/2014 11:00:25 pm

Tit bit dark and sinister. But so well written. :)

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Mollie Claire link
3/29/2014 11:45:16 am

Thank you. :)

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J. Raven link
3/29/2014 11:10:31 am

Great story! Congratulations on your win! Nice and dark - just the way I like 'em!

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Mollie Claire link
3/29/2014 11:43:47 am

Thanks! I tried to go sarcastic and funny, but my imagination isn't really wired that way. ;)

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Wendy Strain link
3/30/2014 04:57:50 am

Beautifully dark and, like the others said, creepy. A good lesson for everyone to pay attention. If the character weren't so invisible, would he/she still feel the need to do such harm?

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Tom Seymore link
3/30/2014 05:44:34 am

One of the best, most visceral "wake up" stories I have read in some time. Superb.

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